Hit and Run

Grade 6

First Draft:

Ray was driving a car when he hit David Gregg who lived on 1279 Morningside Road. It happened on mountain road where David was riding his bicycle. He died on route to St. Joseph's Hospital. The car was light blue.

Revised:

One night, Ray, Barry, Julie, and Helen were drinking and Barry flipped a coin to see who would drive home. Ray won the toss and drove home. On the way, Ray hit a boy on a bike, who died on the way to St. Joseph's Hospital. His name was David Gregg, who was returning home from a friend's house. I don't think it was really Ray's fault because the bike didn't have reflectors or lights on it, but Ray was wrong to have been drinking and driving. Everyone in the car made a pact, not to tell that they hit David Gregg, for they would be sent to jail for it.